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Re: Blessed Be The Name
Thank you, Colt! Your crit is very helpful! (Seriously, it is!) Sorry about all the misspelled words... my brother turned off all of the spell checks... Also, welcome to YWS! ...
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: Stop
Just wrote this, too. Please tear it apart! Also, please comment! Thanks! :) When did you stop? When did you pop? Where will yo go? Do you even know? Dying, ...
Mar 11, 2009 -
Re: Blessed Be The Name
Just now wrote this... Please review, criticize,tear apart, destroy, ect. and comment. THanks! :) Blessed be the name Of the Lord our God most high. Blessed be the name Of ...
Mar 11, 2009 -
Re: Choose.
Gooder! ^.^ That will satisfy all parties! (Better, actually.) Yes or No?
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: An examination of human life
Pretty nice! Questions, questions.... Asside from some of the forced rhymes, all that needs fixing is... The capitalization and the punctuation. The only way that I could tell the difference ...
Dec 23, 2008 -
Re: I Used To Fly
Wow... Just Wow... That was a good "Wow...", BTW. Only one suggestion, though. In this line, "To something called cancer" might look a little better as "To something called - ...
Dec 23, 2008 -
Re: What's Your Internet Connection?
We've got DSL and Ethernet here, but we might as well have Dial-Up, 'cause the DSL hates me, (no joking, it really will go to extreme lengths just to not ...
Oct 12, 2008 -
Re: Runaway
Yayness, Poetry! XD Anyway, the only thing that I could spot that nobody mentioned was that you need to work on you stanza spacing. For example, She chose to walk ...
Oct 12, 2008 -
Re: Recommend your favorite book
Well, for me, it would be the Holy Bible. It has demons and angels, it talks about dragons, it has war, kings, miracles, prophecies, gods, you name it. And it ...
Oct 2, 2008 -
Re: Flying Dragon
Dang! Pretty sweet! The only thinga that I really saw was that one of the hands seemed kinda backwards... And, as the other two people said, it could be just ...
Sep 23, 2008 -
Re: I'm a Prisoner
Wow... "Is it a crime not having the passion to pursue something you're very good at?" No. I am good at lots of things, but some of I totally don't ...
Sep 22, 2008 -
Re: The Space Between.
Pretty sweet, the way that this is crafted. Aside from what Fye said, one thing caught my eye. In "Most days, though, he was consumed by the silence, and her ...
Sep 22, 2008 -
Re: The Note
Thanks for critiquing! I'll fix the mistakes that x0xGilmore Girliex0x pointed out. And yes, the italics did get messed up, and I'll try to fix those up, also! And if ...
Sep 22, 2008 -
Re: The Note
OK, for the "Terrible Writing Prompts" contest, here's one on prompt #4. This probably won't be that good, 'cause this is last minute 'cause I mis-read the deadline, but here ...
Sep 20, 2008 -
Re: He never...
Wow... Pretty sweet, scary, and so like this world today... Just one thing, though, asides from what the other people said: in "He never called her on the phone, Just ...
Sep 18, 2008
